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dissecting other people's stuff

Looking at other people's material is useful to me.
I see what works and what doesn't.

For example this result>

"Your character is from the UFO (1997-1999) theme and is Messy.
They are a(n) Calligrapher and they enjoy Amateur Astronomy"

from> StackPath

Good details.
Could be improved by attaching the correct article to occupation.
Like this: a Calligrapher, an Artist.

And lose the vague pronoun 'they'.
Instead of:
"They are a(n) Calligrapher and they enjoy Amateur Astronomy"

I would write this as:
"Is a Calligrapher." "Enjoys Amateur Astronomy."

One more example:
"Your character is from the Racers (2001-Present) theme and is Curious.
They are a(n) Android and they enjoy Guitar"

Rewritten as I'd prefer it to be:
"Your character is from the Racers (2001-Present) theme.
Is Curious. Is an Android. Enjoys Guitar."

The rewritten versions are less cluttered.


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