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dissecting other people's stuff

By tree · Apr 30, 2019 ·
  1. Looking at other people's material is useful to me.
    I see what works and what doesn't.

    For example this result>

    "Your character is from the UFO (1997-1999) theme and is Messy.
    They are a(n) Calligrapher and they enjoy Amateur Astronomy"


    from> StackPath

    Good details.
    but.
    Could be improved by attaching the correct article to occupation.
    Like this: a Calligrapher, an Artist.

    And lose the vague pronoun 'they'.
    Instead of:
    "They are a(n) Calligrapher and they enjoy Amateur Astronomy"

    I would write this as:
    "Is a Calligrapher." "Enjoys Amateur Astronomy."

    One more example:
    "Your character is from the Racers (2001-Present) theme and is Curious.
    They are a(n) Android and they enjoy Guitar"


    Rewritten as I'd prefer it to be:
    "Your character is from the Racers (2001-Present) theme.
    Is Curious. Is an Android. Enjoys Guitar."


    The rewritten versions are less cluttered.

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