I'm nerbous about this as I don't let people read my things but I actually like the flow of this one so far. This is the beginning of a story I am writing- nothing eventful yet but I hope you enjoy the setting and style of writing! BTW, I love criticisms so long as its constructive so if you feel I can work on something don't hesitate to say so
. Also the MC's name is very likely going to be changed.
It was a chilly night in late September when Namahine first heard it, carried through the trees by a wind that brought the rich scent of rotting apples and crisp, decaying leaves. At first, she mistook it for a fox cry in the distance, but there was something distinctly unique about it. Namahine had heard foxes her whole life; she had lived with her grandmother in the old house away from the city lights and noises since she was a young girl, so she was accustomed to all of the strange sounds that came along with living in the country. This sound was not a fox. It had the same wild, primal scream, but had a tone that was more…
human. Namahine closed her book, and drew herself up from the floor, taking care to avoid the lit candles, whose flames swayed with her movement so they might meet the delicate, flammable lace of her skirts. Approaching the open window, she took notice of the thin waxing crescent rising steadily in the sky, tinted with a faint red hue. On a night like this when she was barely a teenager, her grandmother had warned her about these moons, that they fortold of unrest in the spirit world. Namahine found them quite beautiful though, and delighted in its strange light. Turning her gaze to the earth, she scanned the large garden in front of the house, and the low oak and sage brushes stretching for a few kilometers away from the property for any sign of life. The light from the candles had drawn the attention of some moths, who flitted and searched desperately for a tear in the screen. There was no sign of the source of the cry, but she hadn’t really expected to see it. The sage and oak wood was fairly low, no more than 15 feet high at its greatest height, but it was dense. There were old animal trails going through it, but most of them were overgrown now, the place all but abandoned except for the ravens, rabbits, and occasional deer. In the distance, near the center of the wood was a patch of open land. She had never noticed it before, and only noticed it now in the dark because of the faint pale green light that seems to cover the earth and highlight its extent.
It must have been a fox, she told herself, but knew that it was a lie. She made up her mind to travel to the clearing in the morning. Collecting her books from their haphazard pile on the floor, Namahine retreated to the opposite corner of the attic where her bed waited, the sheets and dressings messy and inviting.